Friday Fictioneers: Power

PHOTO PROMPT -Copyright - Jan Wayne Fields
PHOTO PROMPT -Copyright – Jan Wayne Fields

She needs to write now. There isn’t much time. Her father made the wedding arrangement yesterday. She couldn’t believe, he’s given her to a monster like himself.

She won’t be like her mother; suffering, crying all the time, unhappy, and sorry to be alive.
The paper is on the desk.She will write everything to her mother, all the truth about her father.

She hears steps getting closer. She knows it’s him. The door opens; she looks into his eyes and says: “I’ll write everything you’ve done to me”. He looks at her and says “You don’t know how to write”.

This is my second story with 100 words for Rochelle challenge. I love all the feedback I’ve received for my first story. Thanks!

29 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Power

  1. Sandra August 13, 2014 / 3:47 pm

    I hope he’s wrong. And that she has enough time.

    • Elizabeth August 13, 2014 / 9:50 pm

      Yes, I hope too. Thanks for visiting!

  2. plaridel August 13, 2014 / 3:59 pm

    i wonder where the mother is. :(

    • Elizabeth August 13, 2014 / 9:51 pm

      I’m not sure if her mother is still around.

  3. rochellewisoff August 13, 2014 / 4:38 pm

    Dear Elizabeth,

    Doesn’t sound promising for her. I feel the panic rising.



  4. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) August 13, 2014 / 4:54 pm

    How evil… just a simple sentence like that.. and she will get locked up.. that father hers deserve to have sharp quills buried under his fingernails.

  5. aliciajamtaas August 13, 2014 / 6:32 pm

    You did so well making the tension rise with short, curt sentences. Kudos.

  6. loisajay August 13, 2014 / 10:17 pm

    He is an evil one, that father. Not a nice man at all. You did good, Elizabeth.

  7. Ellespeth August 14, 2014 / 3:48 am

    Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! My imagination has gone wild with this. Great writing!

    • Elizabeth August 14, 2014 / 8:24 am

      Thanks! I’m glad you liked it!

  8. Sarah August 14, 2014 / 2:30 pm

    Creepy!! Good story.

  9. The Writer's Village August 14, 2014 / 4:53 pm

    he’s really kept her imprisoned…. I imagine like so many men do in other parts of the world, even more so than here.

    • Elizabeth August 14, 2014 / 5:09 pm

      Everywhere there are covards using their power to hurt others. Thanks for visiting!

  10. shanx August 15, 2014 / 3:54 pm

    Well written though sad. Hope she finds a way out and isn’t unhappy like her mother was.

    • Elizabeth August 15, 2014 / 4:10 pm

      Hi shanx, I hope too! Thanks for visiting!

  11. Amy Reese August 15, 2014 / 10:26 pm

    If she has the will, she will write it! I hope she does. It appears as though she has a lot to say. I think he must be trying to scare her, so I hope she stays strong. Nice take, Elizabeth.

    • Elizabeth August 16, 2014 / 4:45 pm

      Thanks Amy, maybe she has learned how to write in secret!

  12. patriciaruthsusan August 16, 2014 / 5:01 am

    Elizabeth, Well written. This is full of tension and dread. I hope she avoids the worst. Well done. —Susan

    • Elizabeth August 16, 2014 / 4:43 pm

      Thanks Patricia, I hope so!

  13. rgayer55 August 17, 2014 / 2:11 pm

    Suspenseful and heartbreaking story. I’m keeping my fingers crossed, but the odds certainly aren’t in her favor. Very well written, Elizabeth.

    • Elizabeth August 17, 2014 / 7:01 pm

      Thanks Russell! Yes, I agree, the odds are against her.

  14. Pratik Kirve August 18, 2014 / 7:22 am

    Ohh… how sad..!! :(
    Great mood creation..!!

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